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Writing Samples
Band 8.5

You recently went to a restaurant but think you could have left your credit card behind. Write to the restaurant. In your letter Tell them when you went there Describe where you think you may have left the credit card Explain what you would like the restaurant to do

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Dear Sir , Hope you are doing well.I am writing
this
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 letter to inform you about my credit
card
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 which I think might have been left in the restaurant during my
last
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 visit. I came to your restaurant
last
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 night with all my friends to celebrate my birthday party .I would like to express gratitude for the wonderful hospitality that you have extended to us .
Furthermore
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,the food served was very delicious and was on time . We were partying till 12.40 am and
then
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 I gave my credit
card
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 to one of the staff members to swipe for the bill amount but later I had forgotten to take the
card
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 back .Maybe it is still with the staff member who did billing or maybe he might have kept it back on the table but I forgot to take it .I don't remember exactly.
Hence
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, I am requesting you to please check once with the staff members if they found any credit
card
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 with the name "Payal Khandelwal" on it and if yes please help to call me so that I can come back to pick it up. Looking forward to your quick reply. Yours Sincerely, Payal

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coherence and cohesion
Consider separating the paragraphs more distinctly for better readability. Each paragraph should ideally focus on a single main idea.
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It would be beneficial to provide a little more detail about the specific staff member or the exact location where the card might be. This can help the restaurant in their search.
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Your tone is polite and friendly, which is appropriate for this context. This adds to the effectiveness of your request.
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You have clearly stated your situation and what you expect from the restaurant, making your request easy to understand.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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