Many people work long hours, leaving very little time for leisure activities. Does this situation have more advantages or more diadvantages?

Nowadays, a large number of humans
working
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lot
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a lot
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of
hours
and
spending
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a few
hours
for
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on
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entertainment
activities
.
This
essay will examine the possible advantages  and disadvantages of working long
hours
and provide a logical conclusion. The two main advantages of working long
hours
are
increase
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the
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productivity and
people
can earn  more money.
Firstly
, working long
hours
may increase the productivity of
people
’s
work
, and they manage to do
their
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all of the
works
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work
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.
Secondly
, with
the
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working overtime
people
can earn more salary, even higher in a double amount than
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salary.
For example
, most
of
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people
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the people
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taking
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take
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extra
hours
from their job for paying more money.
Therefore
, many
people
trying
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to
work
long
hours
for
its
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a
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good wage.
However
, working long
hours
has some major disadvantages like do not have
a
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time
to spend
for
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on
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hobbies and it may
makes
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people
sick.
As a result
of working overtime
people
do not have
a
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  any
time
  to enjoy and
to
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do
the
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enjoyable
activities
, even though they love it.
Also
,
non-stop
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working process can make  individuals ill,  because
of
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, after
hours
of
work
people
easily fall in with lots of pressure and stress of
work
.
For instance
, my uncle
tend
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to be sick at least once a month, and he cannot
finding
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any
time
to do
himself
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his
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favourite
activities
too. To conclude,
although
there are some disadvantages of working long
hours
like do not have any
time
to do the free
time
activities
and some other effecting badly
for
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on
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health, it has an extremely positive impact to increase
the
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efficiency and earn
the
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way more money. I believe that these benefits of working long
hours
outweigh its drawbacks.
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