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The world is becoming more globalism and universally the same. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this agreement?

Nowadays, the world we live in is becoming more
globalism
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global
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 and growing the same. I partially agree with
this
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 opinion due to the reasons which will be discussed in the following paragraphs. Some
countries
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such
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 as the United States, China, the United Kingdom and France have been developed over many years, and you can find advanced facilities there. It so does not matter whether the world has become more globalised for those
countries
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 or not.
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 their economy can become improve by the way.
The globalization
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Globalization
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 for most
countries
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 that we call
third
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 world
countries
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 is more important. They have their local economy.
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, because of
the
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apply
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Globalism, these
countries
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such
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 as Iran, and Dubai have become more powerful. I can give an example: in Iran, most famous brands and facilities are not found, but because of
the
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apply
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globalism, people in Iran can use the internet to sell their products or even buy some products that they cannot pay for in person. As discussed in the above paragraphs, I partially agree with
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this
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the
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 idea that the globe is getting more globalised and universally.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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