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International sporting events promote peace between countries. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is believed that
sports
 games
such
 as Olympics, FIFA and Universiades help to establish peace among countries. Personally, I agree with
this
 statement.
Firstly
, the government of a country where sporting events will prepare special apartments and vehicles for attending sportsmen that act as a sign of respect for athletes who demonstrate their state. Thanks to
this
 kind of act of respect promote building a strong relationship between countries and prevent some possible conflicts.
Secondly
, due to
sports
 events, society faces different nations and it helps them understand the difference between each culture. People usually cannot and do not want to accept other nations
therefore
 there can occur some problems
such
 as racism and religious intolerance.
However
,
sports
 event help to unite people and accept some features.
In addition
, after some sporting competitions, many people decide to remain in the country where were competitions that has a positive impact on the country's economy. In conclusion, international
sports
 games help to establish great and strong relations between nations,
moreover
, they
also
 help to prevent some conflicts between countries.
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