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Some people are born to be leaders, others believe leadership can be learnt. Discuss both the views and give your opinion

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Dr Martins 29 Cowslip Avenue Berkeley 10 April 2018 Re:
Mr
 Robert Smithson, 22 years old Dear Dr Martins, I am writing in regard to
Mr
 Robert Smithson’s discgarge tomorrow. He was treated for partial-thickness burns on the neck and chest accompanied by respiratory distress and he requires community assistance. On 06 April, he was presented in the Berkeley General Hospital
due to
 18 percent TBSA burns. A series of laboratory test were done
such
 as: serum glucose, a chest x-ray, a blood typing and crossmatching all in normal.
In addition
, his arterial blood gas and cardiac monitoring reveals normal in range.
Subsequently
, a laryngoscopy intubation was uncessary because he can tolerate a spontaneous breathing and a bp of 130/80 mmHg.
Although
 there was no evident of wheezing, he was
then
 monitored for signs of difficulty of breathing and circulation problems. He has a urinary catheter and been monitored hourly.
Consequently
, he was observed for fowler’s position.
Overall
,
Mr
 Smithson was stable and been taking: naproxen, 500mg; and tramadol hcl ,50mg; twice daily, the latter as necessary.
Further
, gabapentin 30mg daily before bed and a tetanus prophylactic. It is beneficial for him if a GP or a Community Nurse or a Burn Outpatient personnel will visit him for wound cleaning, topical dressings and daily auscultation.
Mr
 Smithson was given a health teaching regarding sunscreen application when outside, massaging and moisturizing the affected area to lessen dryness.
Additionally
, a breathing exercise were
also
 provided, a light activities and it is contraindicated to do a contact sports. He was reminded to follow his dietary recommendations and to visit a Burns Unit on 17/4/2018. If tou have any questions, please do not hesitate to contact me. Yours sincerely, Nurse
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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