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Businesses should do anything they can to make a profit. Do you agree or disagree with the statement? Use specific reasons and examples to support your position.

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Nowadays,
Businesses
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 are increasing more than a generation ago too much because there are many technologies that support workers. Some may say the result is more important than the solution in the part of business means the
profit
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 is the most important thing.
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 essay will analyse both views. Doing anything to reach the target is shown how hard the business has tried for the result.
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, the high competition in
businesses
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 is increasing so to make more
profit
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,
businesses
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 should not care about the methods. Even though
,
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apply
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 making a
profit
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 is important but many people said that the way to make a
profit
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 is important either. One thing that should be aware of is ethics because it will get
a
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apply
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good
relationships
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relationship
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 with others in the long term.
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, having partners is a good thing because, when the business go worse,the partners will give a helping hand. After considering all these arguments, my view is that it is better for
businesses
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 to care about the method either.
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 it takes more time than another side it is more stable.
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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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