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Businesses should do anything they can to make a profit. Do you agree or disagree with the statement? Use specific reasons and examples to support your position.

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Nowadays,
Businesses
 are increasing more than a generation ago too much because there are many technologies that support workers. Some may say the result is more important than the solution in the part of business means the
profit
 is the most important thing.
This
 essay will analyse both views. Doing anything to reach the target is shown how hard the business has tried for the result.
Moreover
, the high competition in
businesses
 is increasing so to make more
profit
,
businesses
 should not care about the methods. Even though
,
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 making a
profit
 is important but many people said that the way to make a
profit
 is important either. One thing that should be aware of is ethics because it will get
a
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good
relationships
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 with others in the long term.
Moreover
, having partners is a good thing because, when the business go worse,the partners will give a helping hand. After considering all these arguments, my view is that it is better for
businesses
 to care about the method either.
Although
 it takes more time than another side it is more stable.
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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