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Banks should receive billions of dollars in assistance from their government during financial Cris I that was in large part their fault

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Financial institutions ought to be provided with
funds
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 by the
authority
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 during an economic crisis,I totally agree with
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 as they contribute immensely to the maintenance of
cash
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 and
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 ensure adequate distribution of
treasury
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 as well. My
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 point is the contribution to
cash
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 maintenance by the financial institution,the
treasury
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 ensures that there is not too much circulation of
cash
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 and
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 it preserves the value of money because,when there is excess
cash
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 in the public it will lead to the depreciation of
cash
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 value.
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,as they are working to limit excess
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,they are concerned with the level of
funds
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 in circulation being too low thereby resulting in a shortage. Another point is that the
treasury
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 is in charge of the adequate distribution of capital.Here the financial institution makes sure that the
funds
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 being distributed are in the appropriate form and that they should be sent where it is supposed to go,
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:if the
authority
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 should invest in
treasury
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 during a financial breakdown they will preserve it and give it back to the
authority
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 in form of loan
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 with interest thereby generating more profit that can be used by the
authority
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 at the same time giving back to the administration what was given since the financial institution
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 abide by the laid down rules of the government,it will be easier to access what was invested on. In conclusion,I totally agree that the benefit of financial institutions can be utilized by the
authority
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 through investment especially during crises mostly economic since they can help maintain
cash
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 and as well ensure proper distribution of
funds
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.
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