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Your friend is about to move into a new house. Write a letter to this friend. In your letter offer to help him/her to move explain how exactly you can help ask him/her some questions about the new house

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Dear Maninder, I hope
this
 letter would find you in the best of your spirits.
Firstly
, I want to congratulate you on your new house and I am writing to you because I would love to help you with moving stuff to the new place. I think rather than doing everything on our own, we can hire professionals and they could assist us in relocating. I have a few contacts that I can use to hire a packer and mover. As I have told you before they are the people for
this
 job they have skills in moving things from one place to another with ease and minimal damage as they have different types of packing materials for extra protection. All you have to do is provide me with a few details like
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the distance between the new and old house, as they would charge according to how far they have to go,other than
this
 , is it in a busy area or not because
then
 only they would tell us, which hours are good for doing the job to avoid any inconvenience .
Lastly
, what is the width of the main entrance and how many rooms do we have upstairs
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 Share all these details with me so that
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 can make a few calls to get the job done Looking forward to hearing from you. Yours lovingly,
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I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

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