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Artists need a certain amount of freedom to develop their creativity. Some people think that artists should have total freedom to express any thoughts and ideas. What is your opinion?

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increase
 the abilities of a person, they
required
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 to pay some
time
on
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improving them. To
increase
 the
creativity
 level of an
artist
, it is a must to have
freedom
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the freedom
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 on developing the
skills
. And to reveal
the
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ideas
 and
thoughts
, they are required to have
an
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entire
freedom
 on working on that. It’s a common fact that if someone needs to
increase
 the ability of something that they are doing, they need to spend some
time
 on improving them. In the same way, artists required some amount of
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quite
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quiet
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 space to develop their
skills
 to
increase
the
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their
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creativity
 level. The
time
 that spends on skill improvement should be bounded since it is required to apply the
skills
 in
real
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 world. As an example, if the
artist
employed
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 by an organization, the person has
a
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limited
time
 on developing
the
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creativity
. Some people hold the opinion that artists should have total
freedom
 on expressing
thoughts
 and
ideas
.
This
 is true that when a particular person, the
artist
 has full
freedom
 on doing
somethings
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something
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 they good at, that
un-interrupted
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uninterrupted
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freedom
 will push them to their limits which will
be produce
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produce
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 results
such
 as great
thoughts
 and
ideas
.
This
 unbounded
freedom
 will be an ideal and most
the
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important
factorof
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factor of
factor
improving
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in improving
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creativity
 and
skills
. To conclude, there are several factors we need to consider before sticking
into
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 an opinion. It is important to have
a
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bounded
freedom
 for
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the artist
an artist
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artist
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artists
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 in some cases. For
an
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example, an
artist
 employed by organizations/companies to fulfil their business needs.
Therefore
, there will be deadlines and
its
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 acceptable to have
certain
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 amount of
freedom
 to develop the
artist
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artist's
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creativity
 level.
On the other hand
, having unbounded
freedom
 is good for individuals who are independent. But the
freedom
 of expressing
thoughts
 and
ideas
 should be used in an ethical manner.
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