Some people spend most of their lives living close to where they were born. What might be the reasons for this? What are the advantages and disadvantages?

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modern life, few individuals navigate most of their lives living close to where they were born. Because
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the majority of inhabitants prefer to
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to
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countries than
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all
this
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life in the
place
where he was born. From my point of view, there are
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a lot of advantages than disadvantages and in
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essay, I will examine both pros and cons of living in
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another country which is located near their hometown. • There are a number of significant benefits of spending a lot of time near your homeland.
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many
people
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somewhere. For
this
reason, by living in other countries, humans improve their
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, see the
people
around them and learn to deal with them.
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example
, there is a big difference between a
person
who has been to all countries and a
person
who is with foreign
people
and a
person
who is only in his birthplace. Another
advantages
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is it gives
people
the opportunity to
study
abroad.
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example
, if you do not have the opportunity to
study
where you live, you definitely want to live in a
place
where there are enough opportunities to
study
. • Turing t the other side of the argument despite its benefits it
also
has it
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.
First
of all, if a
person
live
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or
study
in another
place
, she definitely misses her homeland and her family members or her parents. It was one of the most terrible
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every
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person
’s life.
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example
,
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, my sister lives and studies not far from where we live, but we don't see her very often, and I think that's too bad. • In conclusion, having
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weighted
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everything mentioned up and I can come to
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that even if you live far away from home, it is extremely worthwhile to go somewhere else to
study
or work or relax. From my point of view, a
person
should not live only in one
place
, and should
also
get to know other places it will be useful for everybody.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Familiarity
  • Comfort
  • Social ties
  • Family ties
  • Belonging
  • Resources
  • Opportunities
  • Fear
  • Unknown
  • Financial constraints
  • Cultural attachment
  • Language barriers
  • Limited education
  • Skills
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