People think that the best way to reduce crime is to give longer prison sentences. Others believe that there are other alternative solutions for reducing crime. Discuss both views and give your opinion on this topic.

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This
day, the number of
crimes
are
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increasing from a generation ago so the number of criminals
are
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increasing too. Some people said that
,
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giving
a longer prison sentences
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a longer prison sentence
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can reduce the
criminals
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number of criminals
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.
This
essay will analyse both views. Giving
a longer prison sentences
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longer prison sentences
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which
mean
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means
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take
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taking
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the
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criminals to live in
the
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jails longer, could reduce
crimes
since
have
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a limit
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limit
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area to live so the prisoner can not make a crime outside the jail.
Moreover
,
in
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the jail have
a strict rules
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strict rules
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controlled by
police
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the police
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therefore
the
prisoner
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prisoners
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will
wil
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will
be better
when
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off when
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get
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out
the
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of the
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jails
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jail
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.
However
, the real cause of
crimes
is
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living, many
criminal
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criminals
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make
crimes
because
the
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living is terrible.
Therefore
the government should more pay
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attention
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attentions
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attention
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about
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to
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the citizens
living
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.
Similarly
, education is important too, many prisoners do a crime because they were taught
with
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a
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apply
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bad things
thus
, the
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government
goverment
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government
should pay attention not only
a
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living but
also
the education.
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, it
is depend
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on
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individuals
individual
idividuals
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individuals
too,
thus
if everyone is having
self awareness
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self-awareness
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then
the
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crimes
wil
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will
decreasing
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.
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