The pie charts compare how much the proportions of three fast-food outlets are favoured by teenagers in Vietnam and Indonesia in 2017 with projections for 2027.

The pie charts compare how much the proportions of three fast-food outlets are favoured by teenagers in Vietnam and Indonesia in 2017 with projections for 2027.
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The pie charts show the popularity of three fast-food chains among children in their teens in
Vietnam
and
Indonesia
for the year 2017 and forecasts for 2027.
Overall
, in 2017, for
this
age group, Burger King was the favourite of these restaurants in
Vietnam
, but the least well-liked in
Indonesia
, where
McDonald’s
was favoured. For 2027,
although
McDonald’s
is projected to be less popular in
Indonesia
, it will likely remain the preferred establishment and is
also
anticipated to become the most popular in
Vietnam
. In 2017, Burger King was the most well-liked fast-food restaurant in
Vietnam
with 52.8%,
although
it only had 15.4% in
Indonesia
, making it the least favoured there. It was
McDonald’s
, with 60.8%, which was the most popular in
Indonesia
and can
also
be seen to have a significant percentage in
Vietnam
at 43.1%. KFC had 23.8% in
Indonesia
and 4.1% in
Vietnam
for the same year. Predictions for 2027 place
McDonald’s
as the favourite in both countries, at 57.4% and 48.5% for
Vietnam
and
Indonesia
, respectively. Burger King’s percentage is estimated at 39% in
Vietnam
and 12.3% in
Indonesia
.
Finally
, KFC is expected to become more popular in both countries, with 6.3% in
Vietnam
and 39.2% in
Indonesia
.
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