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The pie charts compare how much the proportions of three fast-food outlets are favoured by teenagers in Vietnam and Indonesia in 2017 with projections for 2027.

The pie charts compare how much the proportions of three fast-food outlets are favoured by teenagers in Vietnam and Indonesia in 2017 with projections for 2027.
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The pie charts show the popularity of three fast-food chains among children in their teens in
Vietnam
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 and
Indonesia
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 for the year 2017 and forecasts for 2027.
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, in 2017, for
this
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 age group, Burger King was the favourite of these restaurants in
Vietnam
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, but the least well-liked in
Indonesia
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, where
McDonald’s
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 was favoured. For 2027,
although
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McDonald’s
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 is projected to be less popular in
Indonesia
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, it will likely remain the preferred establishment and is
also
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 anticipated to become the most popular in
Vietnam
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. In 2017, Burger King was the most well-liked fast-food restaurant in
Vietnam
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 with 52.8%,
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 it only had 15.4% in
Indonesia
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, making it the least favoured there. It was
McDonald’s
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, with 60.8%, which was the most popular in
Indonesia
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 and can
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 be seen to have a significant percentage in
Vietnam
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 at 43.1%. KFC had 23.8% in
Indonesia
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 and 4.1% in
Vietnam
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 for the same year. Predictions for 2027 place
McDonald’s
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 as the favourite in both countries, at 57.4% and 48.5% for
Vietnam
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 and
Indonesia
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, respectively. Burger King’s percentage is estimated at 39% in
Vietnam
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 and 12.3% in
Indonesia
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.
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, KFC is expected to become more popular in both countries, with 6.3% in
Vietnam
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 and 39.2% in
Indonesia
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, although".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words vietnam, indonesia, mcdonald’s with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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