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Some people spend most of their lives living close to where they were born. What might be the reasons for this? What are the advantages and disadvantages?

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Nowadays one of the widely discussed issues is In over present modern life we see many
people
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far away
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 places to live but in earlier times
people
 preferred to live in their native place.
However
, there is no absolute agreement as some
people
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 beneficial while others consider everything associated with
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negatively
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. In
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 I will examine both pros and cons of
this
 controversial issue. There are a number of significant benefits of living far away.
Firstly
, it is safe to live in a familiar place, they lose the desire to move to another place.
Second
, he enjoys living with his parents and friends. It can help in life's difficulties. These are the reasons that keep
people
 in their own country or city. Another advantage is that you know your hometown or country better than any other country. Turning to the other side of the argument, there are some disadvantages of living far away. One of the disadvantages is that
people
 close to you can interfere in your affairs. But he may miss his parents and relatives. Another major disadvantage is that once you are in
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 unfamiliar environment, you can quickly develop new problems. It is better to live in your hometown because of the difficulty of having strangers in a foreign environment. Having weighed everything mentioned up, I can come to
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 conclusion that most
people
 choose to live close to where they were born because it gives them a sense of security and makes them a part of society in which they blend quite well.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Familiarity
  • Comfort
  • Social ties
  • Family ties
  • Belonging
  • Resources
  • Opportunities
  • Fear
  • Unknown
  • Financial constraints
  • Cultural attachment
  • Language barriers
  • Limited education
  • Skills
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