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The maps depict current structures of Islip town center and future look after planned developments are applied.

The maps depict current structures of Islip town center and future look after planned developments are applied.
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The current map of a small
town
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 named Islip is depicted in the first figure
while
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 the following figure illustrates the plans for its development in future. Currently, the
town
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 map presents the position of the main
road
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, which is through the centre of the
town
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 and surrounded by shops on both sides. To the southwest, there lies a school connected via a narrow
road
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. The
park
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 is located on the southeast of the main
road
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 and can be accessed by an identical
road
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 to the school. In between the
park
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 and the school, there lie the housing areas. On the north side of the main
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road
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 there is a vast countryside just behind the row of shops. The second figure shows the future scenario of Islip after the development of the
town
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.
According to
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 the plan, the main
road
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 will be replaced by a
road
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 that can only be used by pedestrians intending to shop from the shopping areas by the
road
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. And the roads connecting the schools and parks will be upgraded to dual carriageways and will form a continuous way for travelling from the
west
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 side to the east side of the city. A new housing area is
also
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 planned to be situated on the
west
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 end of the
park
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 by the dual carriageway. To the north, a bus station, a modern shopping centre and a car
park
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 are planned followed by a new housing area, in a few
minutes
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 walk from the main carriage
road
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, from
west
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 to east. To connect them, another semicircular
road
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, similar to the one in the south, is shown in the blueprint.
This
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road
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 will be open for all sorts of transport travelling within the city
as well as
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 crossing it from
west
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 to east or vice versa.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words town, road, park, west with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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