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Question: Some people feel that public money should not be spent on cultural amenities, such as museums, theaters and art festivals. How important do you think these things are to society as a whole ? Are there any areas which are more important for the government to fund.

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Certain folks around the world believe that public revenue must not spend on traditional cultural
facilities
 like Festivals of art, theatres and museums. In my point of view, it is crucially important to invest money in cultural places and the impending essay
also
 elaborates that lawenforment offices should pay for some other areas. There are many reasons why
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public funds should spend on cultural places by the government. To start with, a country is well-known for its cultural
identification
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 and investing money in these
facilities
 may contribute to preventing
destroying
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 causing new talent will grow and
besides
that
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 an increasing amount of pay will be beneficial for the government by selling
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ticket
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.
For example
, Egypt invests almost 4 million dollars monthly on the
renovision
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renovation
revision
 of theatres and having yearly Festivals.
However
, there are some individuals
who
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 that argue tax income must be spent on educational areas.
To begin
 with, building new learning environments may contribute to people gaining knowledge which in turn leads to the community having an increasing number of professionals with academic skills in the future;
additionally
, investing money from public revenue on constructing new libraries
also
 may result in a significant increase in the number of educator spending time in libraries preparing lessons or homework.
For instance
, the times announced that almost 2000 libraries were built in Toronto with more
facilities
. In conclusion, it is true that some individuals do not like to pay for improving
of
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traditional
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amenities
aminities
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amenities
. From my point of view, it is
vital
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 important to invest in cultural
facilities
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because
becuase
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because
 it is
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identification
adentification
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 of a nation and
also
 building educational places are crucial
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important
importance
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and importan
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importan
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important
 due to
have
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litirated
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litigated
 people in
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society.
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