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Many people believe that being a trainee can be an excellent position for fresh graduates to promote their careers, but some do not. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Fresh
graduates
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 are expected to become trainees because
this
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 is a perfect
position
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 which suits inexperienced
graduates
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.
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, some people argue that employers should not let them in that
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 because of
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. In my essay, I will demonstrate
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both views and give my opinion. Letting new
graduates
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 be trainees get a huge benefit. Those
graduates
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 have a chance to be accustomed to a new environment. To be more specific, new employees are demanded to learn about
company's
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 work culture and regulations.
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, the fresher need to learn and absorb enormous information before getting their
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 task in their
position
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 so it is better for them to train for 2 months.
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, after their training time, they can meet the demand of
companies
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 and can achieve whatever tasks are given to them.
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, there might be a risk for
companies
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 because new inters can easily quit their
position
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 and change to other places. If they spontaneously quit their jobs, it is difficult to find new candidates whose skills suit empty positions.
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, it takes a huge amount of time and money to train them from
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. To avoid it, most
companies
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 are now having a complicated interview process to eliminate the risk of quitting.
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, it affects some opportunities to find jobs
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 fresh
graduates
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. In my opinion, the benefit of being a trainee far outweigh any risks. I recommend all
companies
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 should train their freshers for at least 2 months before giving them any tasks in order for them to get used to doing all tasks that required their skillsets and
knowledges
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knowledge
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 from university.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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