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Should Government funding be spent on education and health care systems? What is your opinion?

#government #education #health #care #systems
School
, the temple of knowledge is responsible for shaping the future of young minds.
However
, it is mainly of two types co-ed and
non co-ed
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, guardians have the liberty of choosing between the two. Kids going to single-sex
school
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schools
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 are at a loss,
that is
 what a part of society thinks. I completely disagree with
the
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 belief. With the introduction of
right
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of
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 knowledge, and a strong belief that all genders are equal. Co-educational schools were introduced, a system in which it does not matter what is your gender, and everyone is provided with equal opportunities.
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 there is a concept of
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single sex
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school
, in which students who belong to
a
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particular sex are allowed.
Additionally
, the students are provided with similar facilities, yet some people
thinks
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 that one is better than the other which is totally not true.
In contrast
 to all
this
, sometimes
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a student
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student
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students
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 who
study
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 in
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single sex
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school
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schools
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 tend to do better because they are surrounded by people
with
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same
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the same
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 gender group.
For example
, my friend who studied in a
non co-ed
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school
 is a government official and is now trying for higher education, apart from him being shy sometimes, academically he is better than any of us. So it does not matter
from
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which college or
school
 one
belong
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to
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it is the hard work that makes a person
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successful
successfully
successfull
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successful
. Despite, the opinion or thinking of any section of society. I believe that if a
school
 is providing you with
same
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 set of skills and knowledge as a
school
 in which students from different genders study together, one should not face any
problem
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 in future.
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