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You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child. Write a letter to the parents. In your letter explain why you would like the job give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia

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Dear Sir/Madam, I am Claire and am writing to you to express an interest in babysitting your six-month-old daughter as advertised in the Australian magazine. I have completed my graduation in
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 psychology and recently moved here to complete my thesis for my master's degree applications. As you can see, I am professional and have good knowledge of a
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's needs and thinking processes.Before coming here, I used to help my mother to run a daycare centre where we used to look after from 3 months infants to 10 years old children. I am fond of kids and have seen the same affection and jolly acceptance toward me from them too. I understand for parents it is crucial to leave a
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 with strangers and especially for , a mother it's nigh on impossible. Since
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 I have theoretical and practical experience in how to manage their safety and security , I can assure you that your
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 will be in safe hands. Currently, I am staying with my friend who is my co-partner in the thesis presentation. Mostly on weekends or on holidays we usually study together or visit a childcare centre. So, I would like to take a day off on Sundays or on public holidays for the same purpose. I would appreciate a reply at your earliest convenience. Thank you for your time and consideration. Yours sincerely, Reshma Dubey
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Childcare, Nurturing, Patience, Creativity, Early childhood development
  • Babysitting, Au pair, Engaging, Responsible, Enthusiastic
  • Safety, Trustworthy, Adaptability, Proactive, Cultural exchange
  • Activities, Educational games, Language skills, Exploring
  • Volunteering, Community involvement, Australian culture
  • Flexibility, Personal traits, Schedule, Enrichment
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