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Some people believe that the internet will replace traditional books in the future. Do you believe this would be a positive or a negative development.

#people #internet #books #future #development
In
a
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recent
year
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years
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,
Internet
 has become part of our daily life especially about easier to discover
knowledges
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knowledge
pieces of knowledge
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. Many people believe that traditional
books
 will eventually be replaced by the
internet
 in the future. In the following paragraph,
positive
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the positive
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 and negative development of
this
 issue will be outlined in detail. Nowadays, people
tends
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 to
used
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the
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internet
 book, or
we
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commonly
know
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 as E-book,
instead
reading
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of reading
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on
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the
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papers.
This
 is because reading an e-book makes it simpler to approach our target topic, and
also
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 less time than finding the
books
 in the library.
Moreover
,
internet
books
 have widely
topic
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topics
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 not only about what we want but
also
around
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about
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 our desire topic.
This
 is due to better development machines for easily life about reading
books
 on the
internet
 in the future.
On the other hand
, there are spilt opinions about
internet
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the internet
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 will replace traditional
books
. Some believe that
internet
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the internet
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 might leads to harm people's growth.
For instance
, reading
books
from
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on
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 the
internet
 make us lose one's sight from
lights
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the lights
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 of computer or
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electronic
eletronic
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electronic
 machines which contribute to
distract
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distracting
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eyes
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our eyes
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.
In addition
, reading
from
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on
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 the
internet
make
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 us less feeling than reading on
papers
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paper
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.
For example
, the sounds of
paper
's flip, the smell of new
paper
 from the bookstore, and the sense
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from
frome
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from
 our physical body
paper
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paper
.
This
 all can be negative development which
internet
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the internet
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 can't be
replace
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replaced
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. In conclusion, I personally disagree with
this
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viewpoint
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view point
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 because I believe that the growth of electronic
books
 to replace traditional ones will have detrimental effects in the future.
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