In some countries, secondary school aims to provide a general education across a range of subjects. In others, children focus on a narrow range of subjects related to a particular career. Which do you think is appropriate in today’s world?

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are considered the future of a nation and schools are
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of the best ways to groom them. Some
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focus on subjects related to a unique career path whereas others teach a wide range of subjects, both of them
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their own pros but in the current
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a range of knowledge about many
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is much more valuable. If young kids are given an opportunity to study and explore a variety of
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they have a higher chance to find something they genuinely like and possibly want to build a career in,
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, a kid whose parents wanted him/her to be a doctor and designed his curriculum
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can have a natural talent for art or
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but could never discover it due to the lack of exposure. For children,
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new
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is a very important component in the journey of self-discovery. To
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a huge variety of knowledge to carry out
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everyday tasks with ease so having only a limited
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may prove to be a disadvantage to children when they become adults. An example of
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a friend of mine who is a
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golfer, from an early age he chose
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sport and started paying little to no attention to what was
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in class due to which he was unable to learn basic
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as general knowledge and how to do basic taxes. The same goes for other people to stick to
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idiom that goes "Jack of all trades but master of none" , little
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people know that it is not the full idiom as the original
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states " Jack of all trades but master of
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is still better than the master of
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exposure to a range of subjects is always considered better than the rest.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • broad foundation
  • well-rounded individuals
  • critical thinking skills
  • adaptability
  • specialized skills
  • job readiness
  • interconnected world
  • global economy
  • flexibility
  • pivot between careers
  • future-proofing
  • automation
  • transferable skills
  • holistic development
  • explore various interests
  • economic structure
  • workforce demands
  • local context
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