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Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmes (for example working for a charity, improving the neighbourhood or teaching sports to younger children). To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It has been suggested that high school students should be involved in unpaid
community
 service as a mandatory part of high school programmes. Many
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collages
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colleges
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 are offering voluntary
services
,
however
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 they are not compulsory, in my opinion, it is a good idea to make
community
services
 mandatory as it will offer
lot
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 of
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real time
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 learning to
the
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adolescents.
Firstly
,
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teamwork
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team work
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 and coordination
skills
 are required for any
community
services
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,
hence
 involving students will help them to learn these
skills
 in the school days,
moreover
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 they will develop leadership
skills
also
.
For example
,
teacher
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the teacher
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 gives them one task of spreading awareness of cleanliness in a town, so they will have to prepare handouts or banners,
in
addition
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 some speech and tagline preparation is
also
 required, of
course
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these
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require
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lot
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 of planning and coordination,
thus
 pupils will learn it while executing the task.
Secondly
, social
services
 will inculcate
the
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 sense of responsibility in adolescents towards
the
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society and they will evolve the
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mindset
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mind-set
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 of helping and caring which will make them better citizens of
this
 global village. To exemplify, involving them in any
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fundraising
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fund raising
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fundraising
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 activity for needy people will aid them to
understands
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the obligations of
rich
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the rich
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 towards poor ones and hold their hands in
the
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difficult time,
thus
 minimizing the financial gap and spreading equality.
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,
by
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involving them in teaching sports to younger children will develop their ability in
the
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leadership
skills
 and teaching
skills
. To conclude, mandatory
community
services
 for teenagers
is
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 advantageous as students will learn various
skills
 like
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teamwork
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team work
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teamwork
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, coordination,
leadership
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and leadership
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,
also
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in addition
 they will implant
sense
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 of responsibility towards the
community
thus
 benefitting
the
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society as a whole.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • compulsory
  • high school programmes
  • unpaid community service
  • charity
  • improving the neighbourhood
  • teaching sports
  • sense of responsibility
  • empathy
  • broader perspective
  • societal issues
  • college applications
  • job applications
  • positive impact
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