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Do you support that the nuclear technology should be used for constructive purposes? Use your own knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.

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There are a large number of benefits that take place in nuclear
technology
. Nuclear automation is a branch of science that deals with the study of atomic
energy
. The word nuclear means " constituting the nucleus of an atom". But with
this
 ,
technology
 there were destructive areas
also
. All over the
world
 identify new techniques and inventions through
this
 field. Nuclear
energy
 creates a mass revolution in the life of humans.
They
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There
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 were a lot of new scientific
method
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methods
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 origin from
this
 area. Mostly, widely used in atomic reactors , especially for the construction of "atom bombs". The atom bomb working principle is atomic fusion.
This
 bomb is highly massive and destructive. It may cause a great explosion all over the
world
 and sudden destruction occurs and causes threaten the entire life of living organisms. Hiroshima and , Nagasaki the two places in Japan were burned by dropping atomic bombs by America in the
second
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Second World War
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world
 war. In , another way certain countries use
this
 nuclear
energy
 as nuclear weapons . These are very dangerous to humans and other living organisms.
On the other hand
, nuclear
energy
 is widely used in the
field
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fields
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 of medicine, nuclear reactors, paint production, industries, food
technology
 etc. In the area of medicine , the treatment of cancer is done by using
this
technology
 ,
for example
 : chemotherapy, C T scan, ultra radiation scanning etc.
Nevertheless
, in the industrial production of Methane, acetyl acid, ethanol, and other laboratory purposes these technologies were widely used . In conclusion, when new inventions of
technology
 arise it is great for our humankind but we should use
this
 technique for the welfare of the nation and not for the destruction of the living
world
.
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