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As well as making money, businesses also have social responsibilities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#money #businesses #responsibilities
In
the
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modern
society
, it is encouraged that young
people
 should develop
the
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enterprenership
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entrepreneurship
 mindset and
building
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 up their own enterprises. It is clear to me that the more money the
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business
bussiness
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business
 makes
the
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them
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 more responsibilities to
the
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society
 it should contribute
to
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.
Firstly
, it is absolutely no
deny
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 that businesses play a very important role in creating jobs for man.
For example
, Vinamilk is one of the largest food producers in Vietnam. They currently employ around 10 000 workers throughout Vietnam, according to their annual report. We can imagine
that
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what might be happening if
this
 giant company
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bankrupt
bankcrupt
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?
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 Thousands of workers will
be
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potentially
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loosing
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losing
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 their job.
This
 might impact markedly
in
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the social
balancing
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 and the social
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security
sercurity
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security
 as unemployment will rise up.
Secondly
, large organizations are capable to use their manpower to provide social facilities
in
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 a bigger scale.
For instance
, during the
last
 two years of Covid, Vingroup,
in
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 accompanied
with
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by
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 Chairman
Mr.
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 Vuong and his wife had been donated nearly 9000
billions
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 VND to help our government and Vietnamese
people
 to fight
with
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the coronavirus.
This
 unbelievable distribution
help
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 to save many
people
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people's
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 lives and children. Without
this
 generous
co-operation
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 and these individuals, it is hard for our government to do
such
 things fastly and precisely as they
was
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 shown to the public in the
last
 period of time. In conclusion, universal is operated in a circle. As it is written in one of
favourite
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quote
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 that “the more you give out, the more you get back”. The more the
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business
bussiness
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business
contribute
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 back to
people
, to
the
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society
, to help them to archive the desirable goals, the more successful the
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business
bussiness
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business
 can get as it will be paid back by
people
 who were helped by them. The companions between enterprise and
society
 help to
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facilitate
faciliate
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facilitate
to create
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a
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better world for
people
 to live
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Social responsibilities
  • Corporate social responsibility
  • Ethical behavior
  • Societal impact
  • Stakeholders
  • Profit-driven
  • Public perception
  • Environmental sustainability
  • Community development
  • Human rights
  • Workplace safety
  • Altruism
  • Balanced approach
  • Accountability
  • Consumer loyalty
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