Some people say History is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that, in today’s world, subjects like Science and Technology are more important than History. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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than others.
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history
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, that in our developed
world
Science and Technology are more helpful for students. I
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truly
truely
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believe that the
second
opinion is right, and will explain it. But in
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both sides will be discussed. On the one hand, every person should know the
history
: how
people
and animals
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, and how
did
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we get to
nowadays
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. We need to know all about our past
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and remember it.
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, every student should take part in discussions about the
history
of his country, and
level
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of
knowledges
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of
this
subject shows how much IQ has
this
person. The British newspaper wrote about
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the importance
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of knowing
history
from school
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and make a social experiment. Almost 70% of respondents knew all the main parts of
history
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of England. Of course,
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history
is
a
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important subject, and young pupils start to study it
since
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average
school
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. All
the
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human
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humans
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need to remember the main wars, the
World
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Government. On
the
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another
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hand, in our developed
world
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we should look forward
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future, and for
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we need to study students many other main subjects like Science and Technology. I think they are more important than
History
does
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because
people
have to live now, not in the past. We should make new experiments, find new
knowledges
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and soon go to explore
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Space and the
World
Ocean. All the subjects are important, but we cannot see to our Future without knowing elementary Science, and we couldn't even live life now, without that. In conclusion, I think
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cultural heritage
  • Historical perspective
  • Analytical skills
  • Contextual understanding
  • Technological advancements
  • STEM (Science, Technology, Engineering, Mathematics)
  • Innovation
  • Interdisciplinary
  • Job market
  • Climate crisis
  • Cultural identity
  • Critical thinking
  • Humanities
  • Contemporary issues
  • Integration
  • Tech-savvy
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