Some people say History is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that, in today’s world, subjects like Science and Technology are more important than History. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays many

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believe that some school subjects are more important

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than others.

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history

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people

say

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, that in our developed

world

Science and Technology are more helpful for students. I

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truely

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believe that the

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both sides will be discussed. On the one hand, every person should know the

history

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people

and animals

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, and how

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we get to

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. We need to know all about our past

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and remember it.

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, every student should take part in discussions about the

history

of his country, and

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knowledges

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knowledge

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subject shows how much IQ has

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person. The British newspaper wrote about

importance

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the importance

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of knowing

history

from school

programme

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and make a social experiment. Almost 70% of respondents knew all the main parts of

history

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the history

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of England. Of course,

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history

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important subject, and young pupils start to study it

since

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average

school

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. All

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human

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need to remember the main wars, the

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Government. On

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another

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hand, in our developed

world

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we should look forward

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future, and for

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we need to study students many other main subjects like Science and Technology. I think they are more important than

History

does

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because

people

have to live now, not in the past. We should make new experiments, find new

knowledges

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knowledge

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and soon go to explore

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Space and the

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Ocean. All the subjects are important, but we cannot see to our Future without knowing elementary Science, and we couldn't even live life now, without that. In conclusion, I think

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Some people say History is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that, in today’s world, subjects like Science and Technology are more important than History. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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