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Some people prefer to shop for food in supermarket while some others prefer to shop online. Discuss both view and give your opinion

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It is claimed by some that shopping in the supermarket is
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preferable
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preferrable
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 whilst others tend to shop online. In my opinion, both options for shopping are desirable and each of them has its positives. On the one hand, since the foundation of shops or malls, people have purchased everything from there and one of the reasons,
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, when buying clothes or food is the option of checking which brings more advantages. To illustrate, in terms of trying on to know whether it is proper in size or not, or tasting the quality and learning
ingredients
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the ingredients
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 of food are crucial factors to be in the shopping
centers
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.
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, recent developments in
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cutting-edge devices create more opportunities,
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 as shopping online which is more
prefferable
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preferable
, especially, when buying abroad. Shopping worldwide,
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, offers
variety
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 of goods and great deals which are not
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 in
current
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the current
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 country, thereby via online purchasing,
it
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apply
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helps to save more
in
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time and obtain the orders without any serious efforts except a little bit
online
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 progress.
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, people make
us
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 of several deals, especially in the holidays for cutting more in the actual prices. To conclude, every one of the methods for shopping
bring
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 about significant chances for people's lives and I reckon that it is undeniable to neglect their roles.
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