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Nowadays more people are choosin to socialize online rather than face to face. Is this a positive or negative development?

#people #choosin #face #development
In recent years, there has been a new
trending
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 toward virtual communications and most
people
 prefer
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to interfere with each other
face to
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face
. As far as I am concerned
this
 is a negative development due to the reasons which will be discussed in the following paragraphs. In my point of view, not only does affect our personalities
the
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 virtual world, but
also
 it causes tremendous impacts on our mental and spiritual health. These ideas are derived from our nature and fundamental instincts, which separate us from robots, exclusively by our
emotion
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. As a matter of fact, whenever
people
 intend to negotiate with someone else, they are seeking
for
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reactions. These responses lead us to build up our following relations.
Furthermore
, these interactions make a huge contribution to
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 our personality. If you found a useful trait in someone, you would take an advantage of
this
 to improve your moral principles.
Besides
this
, sociable characters are more eager to meet
people
 in person and encounter
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them.
On the other hand
,
although
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 technologies pave the way for communications, we should not ignore the subsequent consequences on our health. It is not
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 that dissociation from
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real world
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 leads to various psychologic illnesses. Most
psychologic
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 obstacles are rooted in isolation and detachment from
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society and real life.
This
 sequestration impairs your judgement. To sum up, these days greater numbers of
people
 prefer to have discussions online in an implicit environment, whereas some other groups try to keep in touch with
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others
face
 to
face
.
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