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Some people think job satisfaction is more important than job security. But others believe that people cannot always enjoy their jobs and having a permanent job is more important. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Nowadays, almost everyone wants to find a suitable
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 after graduating.
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, whether the work position is secure if they can work for a long time, and how satisfied they are is a controversial problem. In my opinion, what we need most is a
job
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 and safety and enjoyment in it so that we can work for a long time. On the one hand, some people think that just focusing on whether they are happy when they are working is enough, but they ignore whether the
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 is safe or not. That means happiness is more important than security.
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, many people like adventure jobs,
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 as diving instructors.
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 is a high-risk
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, but they love it for the same reason that they feel happy and enjoy it despite the danger.
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, some believe that they would be unhappy when working in the same position for a long time.
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, cashier or operator is the type of
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 described here. People will be bored after several months since they have to do the same things every single day.
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, they will lose their enthusiasm very quickly. With developed technology, I think many jobs will disappear.
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, some jobs that are repetitive should be replaced. We’d better continue learning the knowledge and skills that we are interested in. It is a good way to find a suitable workplace, not only beneficial for ourselves but
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 for the whole of society. When we have a permanent
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 that we like to do, we will be happy with it. In conclusion, it is not easy to get a permanent career, especially one that can make a person enjoy it. So, improving skills and technology is very important.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • 1. **Job Satisfaction**: Fulfillment, pleasure, gratification, contentment, happiness at work, engaging work, meaningful work, passionate career.
  • 2. **Job Security**: Stability, permanence, steady income, financial security, long-term employment, dependable employment, stability in the workplace.
  • 3. **Work-Life Balance**: Equilibrium, harmonious work-life, time management, personal time, family time, balance between professional and personal life.
  • 4. **Mental Health**: Well-being, psychological health, stress reduction, emotional health, workplace happiness.
  • 5. **Professional Growth**: Career advancement, skill development, learning opportunities, professional development, personal growth.
  • 6. **Economic Conditions**: Job market, employment rates, economic stability, financial climate, recession, economic downturn.
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