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Some people believe that violence on television and in computer games has a damaging effect on the society. Others deny that these factors have any significant influence on people’s behavior. What is your opinion?

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These days, the increase
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TV programmes and video games with harsh scenes has been a subject of criticism. Some
people
 think that
this
 kind of content should be banned because of
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 dangerous impacts,
however
,
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others have a contrary opinion.
Although
 violence
provide
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 a closer perspective of some issue as some
people
 believe, I still hold a view that violence on TV
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 to
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crime in real life. In terms of cruelty in some programs,
this
 can bring some long-term consequences
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 society.
Firstly
, the savage content can be utilised as an idea for some criminals that are in need.
Instead
 of thinking about a brand new episode of a crime, spending a few
hour
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 watching violent movies is considered to be more effective as well as creative enough to flout the law.
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,
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violent action spread widely in society which
make
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 it hard for the government to offer a solution as soon as
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possible
posible
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possible
. With regards to
the
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video games, they can have a significant impact on the
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adolescent
adolecent
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adolescents
. At that age, action game can easily trigger their interest and made them waste their time
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 the games.Gradually, the mental health of young
people
 can be affected badly and they tend to be seriously angry with every
problems
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 and become less patient with
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other
people
. In conclusion, the more viral cruel content
become
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, the more damaging the consequences
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 in society. The End
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • desensitize
  • aggressive behavior
  • perceptions
  • correlation
  • individual susceptibility
  • media literacy
  • critical thinking
  • interpret
  • regulating
  • negative effects
  • balance
  • societal measures
  • impact
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