Some people believe that violence on television and in computer games has a damaging effect on the society. Others deny that these factors have any significant influence on people’s behavior. What is your opinion?

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TV programmes and video games with harsh scenes has been a subject of criticism. Some

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think that

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kind of content should be banned because of

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dangerous impacts,

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others have a contrary opinion.

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violence

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a closer perspective of some issue as some

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believe, I still hold a view that violence on TV

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crime in real life. In terms of cruelty in some programs,

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can bring some long-term consequences

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society.

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, the savage content can be utilised as an idea for some criminals that are in need.

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of thinking about a brand new episode of a crime, spending a few

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watching violent movies is considered to be more effective as well as creative enough to flout the law.

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violent action spread widely in society which

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it hard for the government to offer a solution as soon as

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possible

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possible

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video games, they can have a significant impact on the

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adolescent

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adolescents

. At that age, action game can easily trigger their interest and made them waste their time

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the games.Gradually, the mental health of young

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can be affected badly and they tend to be seriously angry with every

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and become less patient with

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other

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, the more damaging the consequences

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in society. The End