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Some people think it would be better for large companies and industries to move to regional areas outside large urban centres. Do you think advantages outweigh disadvantages?

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It is believed that it would be more profitable for huge firms to switch from establishing in highly vibrant city hearts to less inhabited
areas
. From my perspective,
this
 topic is not transparent, as both sides have their pros and cons,
although
, in my opinion, there are more merits and demerits.
First
 of all, workers are the most crucial component of every company, due to the fact that they make it as a whole. No business can exist without
people
 that
work
 for it. In less developed
areas
, it is easier to find employees because of a higher unemployment rate.
Also
, giving someone jobless an opportunity to be in a stable company would make them much more loyal and dedicated to the company, as well as eager to
work
.
For instance
,
the
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businesses that are located in city
centers
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 where there are
also
 many firms around are often used as only a step in a career and workers tend to switch them to other places.
For example
, Amazon, after relocating to less developed
areas
, never complains about having not enough
people
 to
work
.
Secondly
, large urban
centers
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 equal high competition in all sectors of business. As said in the previous argument no firm can function without
people
 that
work
 for it. Being a low-wage employee is not ideal for anyone, so
instead
 of staying in one place,
people
 will look to find another.
The
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 example of
that is
 Microsoft, which after changing the locations of their warehouses to poorer city
areas
, retained the number of their employees for almost twice as long as they would with high competition around.
On the other hand
, commuting to
work
 would be much more challenging. Usually, public transport to suburban
areas
 is much worse, for there are fewer roads and cycle paths, so it is harder to get to your destination place.
As a result
, for some, it would be much harder to get to their workplace. Gigantic businesses
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Topic Vocabulary:
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