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Many people believe that it's better to learn something in a gorup, rather than learning it individually. Do you agree or disagree?

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 of
people
 assert that
group
study
 is more beneficial as compared to individual
study
. I,
however
, agree with
former
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 view. In
this
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i
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I
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 shall
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discuss
disscuss
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discuss
 supporting details related to my viewpoint before embarking on
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a specific
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 conclusion with the advancement of my knowledge.
In the
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 justification
of
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 my notion is that it's better to learn
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number
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a number
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 of
people
.
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first
 and foremost is that they can get more data about any
topic
 or lesson.To explain, when they do
study
 by sitting
with
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group
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the group
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then
 they have
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a chance
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 to share their thoughts with each other, as everyone
have
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 different views about each
topic
.
Thus
, they get more information about their
study
.
Besides
this
,
group
study
 is very interesting because when they discuss
topic
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the topic
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 with each other they cannot get bored.
For instance
, one person
have
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 only limited knowledge about any type of lesson and he or she
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has
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 to
do
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study
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a study
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on
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that
topic
 for
long
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 time and
they
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apply
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think it's boring. Some
skeptical
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people
 think if one pupil
do
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study
 alone that's good than
group
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a group
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 because they can easily
concenterate
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concentrate
 and give time to any type of
study
 as well as
mold
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 according to them.
However
, if they do
group
study
, they can build their confidence because they do
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discussion
disscussion
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discussions
 with many
people
.
Hence
,
group
study
 not only improves confidence, but
also
 communication skills. In conclusion,
i
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 reiterate that
group
study
 contains more
constructives
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constructive
 rather than solo
study
 in the terms of collecting more information, interesting and boosting their conversation skills.
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