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These days older people who have retired often choose to spend money on them. For example on holiday, rather than save money for their children. Is this a positive or negative development

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Nowadays, it is common practice for retirees to use all their funds for
self
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self-enjoyment
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enjoyment
instead
 of saving and leaving and leaving an inheritance for their
offsprings
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. I think
this
 is a positive development because it allows elderly
people
 to enjoy the reward of their labour and
also
instill
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 the habit of
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hard work
hardwork
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hard work
on
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 young folks. One reason why the aged should expend money on things that will benefit them is to allow for
enjoyment
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the enjoyment
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 of all the
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hard work
hardwork
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hard work
 they have done earlier in life.
In other words
, most individuals do not have time for
holidays
 during their active
work
 years, so all the monies saved from these long years of
work
 should be spent on
holidays
, trips and other activities that
brings
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 happiness to them when they retire.
For example
, old
people
 going on
holidays
 will keep them busy and improve their quality of life. Another plus point why elderly ones should use their pension for
enjoyment
 is because it serves as a means of encouragement to young
people
 to imbibe the habit of
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hard work
hardwork
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hard work
.
This
 form of
enjoyment
 in old age becomes a motivation for those who are young and still in active service to enable them
put
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 in their best at
work
. As
holidays
 and travelling around the world
becomes
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 a gratification to those who
work
 and save money in their early years.
For instance
, these
holidays
 reinforce the positive value of
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hard work
hardwork
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hard work
 in the youth. In conclusion, I think the elderly should spend money on things that make them happy
instead
 of setting the finances aside for children.
This
 is because the
enjoyment
 is a reward for their Labour and it
also
 encourages young
people
 to
work
 hard.
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