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nowadays, the behavior of students in schools is getting worse. What are the reasons for this and how can this problem be solved?

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It is often considered that the contemporary era is an era of modernisation a
student's
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behaviour
 gets worst in schools. In my, inclination children surrounding play a major role in the change in
behaviour
.
Thus
this
 essay will elaborate
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 causes and in what ways these issues can be resolved. Analyzing the statement and explaining
further
, the
first
 and foremost reason is that some schools only focus on learning rather to take care of students'
behaviour
.
Furthermore
, adolescent makes their own friends and they were highly influenced by each other activities will lead to distraction.
For example
, a clique of 8th standard of john merry school, Delhi reported a case of suicide of a boy gets influenced by his friend to jump from stairs causing
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serious issues. Probing ahead, these problems can be mitigated by school management should take some personality development lectures which help students to
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focus on their academics.
Moreover
, young ones should share their every thought with their family members to will be
helpfull
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 for them learn new morals. To recapitulate, according to the argument one reaches a conclusion that
educates
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 should indulge in other activities which will keep them away from bad
behaviour
.
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