The restoration of old buildings in major cities around the world costs enormous amounts of money. This money would be better spent on providing new housing and road development. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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towns all around the world costs
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amount of
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would be superior spent on providing new apartments and street evolution.
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essay agrees that
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majority of countries the government spent the greatest amount of
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to develop
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or providing new housing
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of fixing ancient
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.
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of all, the burning
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buildings
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should not be allowed
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public
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it is better to build new
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than to repair old ones. • On the one hand, if the government do not allocate
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to fixing
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long ago construction, the
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is in
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crisis. Because tourists contribute to the main wealth of the
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,
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many visitors like to see the ancient edifice. Because the
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are ancient monuments that reveal the history of that
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.
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, all the main tourist places in our
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are places with ancient
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and monuments. Every
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is famous for
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buildings
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, if there are no
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buildings
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, no one would be interested in
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country
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. • On
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, if the
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uses public
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only for new houses and road repairs, it will play a major role in the beautiful appearance of the
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, and through
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, the
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creates conditions for people and makes the appearance of the
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charming.
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, due to the lack of ancient
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in our
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, the state does not allocate a lot of
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for their repair, and
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money
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is mainly spent on building new
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. It creates new conditions for everyone. • In conclusion, having weighed everything mentioned
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and I can come to
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conclusion that it is good that the
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spends a large amount of
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mainly on the renovation of ancient
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. Because these
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are a reminder to people since ancient times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cultural heritage
  • Historical significance
  • Urban charm
  • Tourism
  • Revitalizing the economy
  • Aesthetic appeal
  • Environmental sustainability
  • New construction
  • Urban development
  • Infrastructure
  • Cost-effective
  • Long-term benefits
  • Immediate needs
  • Living standards
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