All parents want the best opportunity for their children. There some people who think that schools should teach the children skills but others think that having a range of subjects is better for a child’s future. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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want to be the ideal opportunity for their kids. according to some
people
who think that
schools
should
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tech
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different skills but some
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kids in their practical
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this
essay should discuss both
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side and
also
give your opinion as well . on the one hand, some believe that
schools
teacher should give preference to the skills because always fruitful for them in their
future
and
also
if you learn some
skill
in your childhood
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you'll be
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expected
exported
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for instance
, in
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all the
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should more value
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the
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skill
rather than the wide
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subjects
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and
language
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.
furthermore
.
people
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schools
should give more value to
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skill
level because once they learn one of the
skill
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so they never sleep hungry.
on the other hand
,
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majority
people
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think that
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of
subject
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will be more
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for their
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children
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in
future
.
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would like to highlight some major
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such
as math and physics
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more
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benefit
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in
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.to illustrate, most of the
schools
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range
of
subject
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subjects
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like
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english
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it
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will be helpful in high education.
in addition
,
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of
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are
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important to learn due
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modern era because in
future
it
all
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about
the
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technology so you'll get
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about that by
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different subjects.
for example
, many school
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systems
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are giving
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web designers and conducting a class on that every week . to sum up,
people
believed that
skill
more important than
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of
subject
but other thinks that
range
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of
subject
will be fruitful for them in their kids
future's
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futures
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. in my opinion,
skill
more
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important than
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a variety
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of
subject
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subjects
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because skills
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always
alwsys
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always
be in your hands.
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