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Many children these days have an unhealthy lifestyle. Both schools and parents are responsible for solving this problem. To what extent do you agree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.

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 years,with the development of society, life becomes more and more convenient.
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 led to an increasing number of
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 developing bad habits due to the convenience of life. I agree that both schools and
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 have a responsibility to address
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 issue. Many
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 overindulge
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children
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 at home.Because the
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 have to live in
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 for the convenience of weekdays.
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 don't get to see their
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 very often.So when
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 come back
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home,
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 always help
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 to do what the
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 should do for themselves.
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 dishes near the TV when they want to watch TV while eating, but as time goes by,
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 will develop the bad habit of watching TV while eating.
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 habit is very bad for
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's digestion.To change an unhealthy lifestyle,
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 should not overindulge
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children
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 and Let
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 learn to take care of
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 life. Not only
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school
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 should make kids have
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lifestyle
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.Some schools
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let kids get better grades,
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 will squeeze the
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's bedtime.
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 not getting enough sleep. Get into the bad habit of going to bed late.Nothing could be more obvious than evidence that to finish homework,many kids do not sleep until midnight.To solve
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school
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 can start setting reasonable goals and making a plan.Train the
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 work and rest habits,
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efficient study. From what has been discussed above, we may safely draw the conclusion that both schools and
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • unhealthy lifestyle
  • growing concern
  • crucial role
  • addressing this issue
  • promote healthy habits
  • educational programs
  • physical activities
  • establish healthy routines
  • nutritious meals
  • collaboration
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