Many children these days have an unhealthy lifestyle. Both schools and parents are responsible for solving this problem. To what extent do you agree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.

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years,with the development of society, life becomes more and more convenient.

However

this

has

also

led to an increasing number of

children

developing bad habits due to the convenience of life. I agree that both schools and

parents

have a responsibility to address

this

issue. Many

parents

overindulge

their

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children

at home.Because the

children

have to live in

school

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for the convenience of weekdays.

Parents

don't get to see their

children

very often.So when

children

come back

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home,

parents

always help

children

to do what the

children

should do for themselves.

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,many

parents

will put their

children

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dishes near the TV when they want to watch TV while eating, but as time goes by,

children

will develop the bad habit of watching TV while eating.

This

habit is very bad for

children

's digestion.To change an unhealthy lifestyle,

parents

should not overindulge

their

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children

and Let

children

learn to take care of

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life. Not only

parents

but

also

school

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should make kids have

healthy

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lifestyle

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.Some schools

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let kids get better grades,

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will squeeze the

children

's bedtime.

This

can lead to

children

not getting enough sleep. Get into the bad habit of going to bed late.Nothing could be more obvious than evidence that to finish homework,many kids do not sleep until midnight.To solve

this

problem,

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school

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can start setting reasonable goals and making a plan.Train the

children

reasonable

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work and rest habits,

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efficient study. From what has been discussed above, we may safely draw the conclusion that both schools and

parents

have a responsibility to address

this

issue.

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unhealthy lifestyle
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addressing this issue
promote healthy habits
educational programs
physical activities
establish healthy routines
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