1. You and your brother have decided to go for a holiday but due to some reason, your brother is not able to join you for holiday. Write a letter to your friend to invite him/her for holiday. Give detail plan of vacation. State reason why your brother will not come with you. Invite your friend.

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Dear Karen, Hope you're doing well. I'm writing

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letter to invite you to join a vacation with me in Bangkok Thailand. The reason why I have to invite you

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my brother is unable to attend

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trip with me. My brother and I booked a flight ticket and accommodation for our short holiday.

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4 nights trip in Bangkok.Our trips will be on 25 November to 1st of December. The flight time will be at 3pm from Melbourne Airport to Bangkok Airport. I was shocked and disappointed that received a message from my brother. He informed me that he has a very important business meeting in Hong Kong needs to attend,and

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his boss would like him to stay in Hong Kong for another 2 days. Since 2019, we are unable to meet each other due to our busy working lifestyle. Today, I would like to invite you to come on

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vacation with me, so that we can have a good time catching up together. Looking forward to hearing back shortly. Kind Regards, Yumi

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
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4Grammar mistakes
 

8 paragraphs

180 words

7.50

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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