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Some people believe that hard word is more important than talent. Do you agree or disagree?

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There are different opinions as to whether or not hard
work
 is of greater importance than
talent
. It is true that some of the best athletes and musicians are naturally talented but is that the main reason
of
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 their
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success
succcess
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success
?
Talent
 definitely helps them to be better than the rest but it is their hard
work
 along with
talent
 which separates them from the rest. I strongly believe that hard
work
 is more important than
talent
 and I shall try to prove my point in the following paragraphs. Someone who is less talented but
a
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better
work
 ethic will outperform a more talented person with a weaker
work
 ethic every time. Whether it be in school, athletics or a career, hard
work
 is matchless.
Talent
 gives us a head start but it requires fuel (hard
work
) to shine brightly. If we are not working hard to keep our
talent
 active and show it to others, we will miss opportunities to achieve the
level
 of success that we can reach. Musicians constantly play, write and sing to keep their gifts functioning at their highest levels. Athletes practice and practice to keep their game at the highest
level
. Hard
work
 is a requirement for succeeding and staying successful regardless of your
talent
level
. Here’s an example of why hard
work
 beats
talent
. Think of the
tortoise
 and the
hare
. The
hare
 had all the
talent
 – natural ability – to outrun the
tortoise
. But the
hare
 neglected hard
work
 while the
tortoise
 worked hard and grasped the opportunity. By keeping his mind and eyes on the goals and remaining engaged in the
endeavor
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, the
tortoise
 prevailed despite the natural ability and
talent
 of the
hare
.
Thus
, to sum up, without hard
work
,
talent
 is virtually useless because most hardworking people can rise to the same
level
 of greatness. Hard
work
 will always reign superior to
talent
.
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