Many children these days have an unhealthy lifestyle. Both schools and parents are responsible for solving this problem. To what extent do you agree with statement?
People
have divergent views towards whether both schools
and parents
have responsibility
to shoulder the Add an article
a responsibility
the responsibility
problem
that nowadays majority
of Correct article usage
the majority
children
have an unhealthy lifestyle
.Some people
firmly believe that schools
and parents
shouldn’t since there are still any
other factors which will lead to unhealthy lifestyles formed like the rapid development of Correct quantifier usage
apply
internet
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the internet
However
，some other people
who hold the same opinions with
me deeply believe that they certainly should.
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as
first
reason why I believe that parents
are response
to Add an article
a response
work
out the problem
that numerous children
have an unhealthy lifestyle
is that parents
were at fault that they didn’t set good examples in front of there
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their
children
in the variety
aspects of living habits since most of Replace the word
various
people
nowadays don’t have Add an article
the people
an
healthy Change the article
a
lifestyle
.In other words
,children
imitated their parents
bad Change to a genitive case
parent's
parents'
lifestyle
which leaded
to the Correct your spelling
led
formed
of their unhealthy lifestyles.To be more specific,Replace the word
formation
children
will Correct your spelling
tend
trend
to stay up late if Correct your spelling
tend
there
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their
parents
always work
overtime or watch TV plays until dawn since they will think is a common thing to sleep late; children
will drink coffee which is bad for their brains’ developments
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development
everyday
if their Replace the word
every day
parents
drink coffee all the time
and everywhere just like drinking water since children
will think coffee is healthy;children
will hardly exercise if their parents
always lay on the sofas during the relaxing times since children
won’t know the benefits from exercise.
The second
reason why I believe that schools
are Add an article
a response
response
to Replace the word
responsible
work
out the problem
that numerous children
have an unhealthy lifestyle
is that they give children
a large amount of stress that students
could only afford through the way of give
up their own Change the verb form
giving
time
.In other words
,students
who under
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are under
the
huge pressure given Correct article usage
apply
by
academic performance will squeeze individual Change preposition
to
time
to study in order to release there
pressure to some extent.To be more specific,Replace the word
their
students
will sleep below 6 hours if there
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their
schools
told them they should consciously do additional questions after finis98hing the homework since students
will stay up late to do a large amount of extra work
although
they have to go to school on 6am tomorrow;students
will always eat fast food if their teachers told them they should improve their action efficiency to save time
for studying since children
will choose fast food to eat in order to recite one more page of words than their classmates every day;children
will sit on the chairs studying all the day if there
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their
schools
will publish everyone’s scores after each exam since students
will refuse to take breaks in order to save more time
for studying with the aim of get
a good place.For Change the verb form
getting
examples
,my little Fix the agreement mistake
example
sisters
,who just celebrated her 10th birthday yesterday,is under Fix the agreement mistake
sister
a
huge pressure given by her Correct article usage
apply
schools
which will publicly criticizing
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criticise
students
who have failed in
examinations.And she Change preposition
apply
eat
instant noodles and Change the verb form
eats
stay
up late Change the verb form
stays
everyday
to maintain Replace the word
every day
academic
performance.
To sum up,both Correct pronoun usage
her academic
schools
and parents
are response
to shoulder the Add an article
a response
problem
that nowadays majority
of Correct article usage
the majority
children
have an unhealthy lifestyle
due to the fact that parents
were at fault that they didn’t set good examples in front of there
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their
children
in the
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a
variety
aspects of living habits and Replace the word
various
schools
give children
a large amount of stress that students
could only afford through the way of give
up their own Change the verb form
giving
time
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