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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign languages can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this statement. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

#country #languages
In
this
 competitive world, many
people
 want to study or work abroad.
However
, some
people
 believe that living in a country where the
language
 is different can lead to significant
problems
 in society, as well as practical
problems
. I totally agree with
this
 idea because of some reasons. Nowadays, to have
well-paid
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job
people
 have to
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possess
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posses
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 certain
skills
. One of these
skills
 may be
language
 literacy. If you do not speak English very well in America,
then
 you may have
problems
.
For example
, you decided to get a
job
 in journalism, where you need to be literate in
the
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speech. More than twenty
people
 have applied for
this
job
, including native speakers of
this
language
, and you have to stand out from
this
 crowd to get
this
job
.
Otherwise
, you will lose
this
 opportunity. From a social point of view, it is difficult for a foreigner to get a
job
 if he does not speak
this
language
 well
,
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 because there are many
people
 cooler than him in
this
 country. As for practical
problems
,
people
 who do not know a foreign
language
 have daily
problems
, starting from everyday questions from the series "how to pay for electricity?" and "where can I fix my bike?" to the more urgent "how to find friends and not become an outcast?". Because of
this
, some
people
 may have thoughts about their own inferiority, discomfort from communicating with the outside world due to the inability to understand
people
 in a new country,
alienation
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. In conclusion, living overseas leads to some severe social
problems
 and practical
problems
 due to
people
's lack of
language
skills
 and communication
skills
.
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