Some people think that one good way to promote world peace is through international sporting events, while others think that it is not. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some individuals think that
one
good way to promote world
peace
is through international
sport
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activities . but others think
that is
not, I agree a little ı don't
agree
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little because there are many ways to promote
peace
such
as cultural food festivals and visiting other countries.
Firstly
, Community can provide
peace
using so many ways. There
are
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more than
one
way to support
peace
. Extended research conducted by CNN revealed that food festivals and song competitions
one
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of the most essential ways to ensure
peace
.
Also
, it depends on
crowd
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if,
people
become well- behaved
peace
will
provided
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. there are so many
people
who are very polite they will avoid
war
. According to CNBC
people
's
behaviour's
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is
one
of the most influential things
about
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providing
peace
.
For example
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if presidents are polite, Russia would not attack Ukraine.
People
's behaviours influence
war
because
people
are emotional
creative
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. They sometimes can not make sensible decisions.
Secondly
. I
also
agree with
this
idea because
sports
events
will decrease
people
's anxiety.
sport
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events
will reduce stress
therefore
, the government should support
sports
events
to avoid
war
. Extended research conducted by Stanford University revealed that
sports
events
are supporting solidarity
therefore
we have to make
sport
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sports
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events
in every country.
Also
, When
people
doing
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the sport
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sport
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they will forget bad things
such
as being selfish , say lie and yelling.
This
will avoid
war
possibility. They will be friends
instead
of
be
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enemies. To conclude, There
are
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more than
one
way to provide
peace
,
also
sports
events
taking
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big responsible for
reduce
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animosity.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • promote
  • world peace
  • international sporting events
  • understanding
  • unity
  • cultural exchange
  • diplomacy
  • shared purpose
  • common goals
  • reduce tensions
  • conflicts
  • positive nationalism
  • fair play
  • sportsmanship
  • teamwork
  • collaboration
  • break down stereotypes
  • prejudice
  • dialogue
  • communication
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