Some people think that it is important to be physically strong to be successful in sport, however others think that mental strength is more important. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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People have different views about the significance of physical or mental
strength
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in
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sport
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sports
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. It is thought that in order to succeed in
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the sport
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sport
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sports
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we have to maintain physical
strength
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, while others believe that mental
health
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is more essential. I believe that a combination and maintenance of
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health
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is the best option to succeed in
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sport
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the sport
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sphere. On the one hand, I agree that physical
health
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plays a major role for those who are involved in
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sport
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sphere.
Usually
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all
kind
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kinds
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of competitions
require
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a lot
effort
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of effort
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and physical investment for successful performance and results.
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, I used to do
sport
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for 8 years before I gave up. I can still recall the moments
where
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I devoted plenty of time
for
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gaining physical
strength
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.
As a
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result
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a large
quantity
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of performances
were
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accomplished successfully,
thus
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I believe that
an
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attention
for
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physical
strength
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should be paid. Mental
health
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support
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us while dealing with challenges, pressures and stresses that may face every human, not only
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sport
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people. Our mental
strength
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can reduce the fear of failure when we work toward goals and stay in stable emotional resilience.
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,
Gennadie
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Gennady
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performance
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with
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knockouts
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knock outs
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. In his
last
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interview
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he said that people had to have
an
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ability to not give a free rein to emotions and feelings which can lead a person off the right path. Mental
strength
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is able to give us
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confidence not to give up. To sum up, I strongly believe that both
type
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types
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of
health
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should be evaluated and appreciated equally.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

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  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
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