The increasing of private car lead to high level of pollution. Do you agree with this statement and what can be done to solve this problem?

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technology has made
cars
affordable for many
people
to buy in recent decades.
Thus
, many
people
possess their own
cars
, and
this
situation can give rise to go up
air
pollution
. I strongly agree with
this
statement and I will explain some reasons
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this
problem, as well as a few ideas to solve it in the forthcoming passages.
Firstly
, it is prevalent that someone who lives in a developed country has
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private
car
. According to a survey
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published in Nature, most human beings like to travel with a comfortable means and the best way
this
is the private
car
.
Secondly
,
people
might prefer their own transportation to go
to
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somewhere they want quick relatively.
Lastly
, another reason for owning an individual
car
is heading off the timetable restrictions of buses or trains. It is a conspicuous fact that
although
there are several sensible reasons,
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the increasing of
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private
car
cause a dire problem namely
air
pollution
. With regard to the recommendations
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solutions,
first
of all,
government
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can come into effect new
legislations
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pertaining
the
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emission of
cars
, especially
gas guzzler
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ones.
Thus
,
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air
pollution
can be controlled with new
legislations
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. Another solution is that municipalities spur
people
to take public
trasportations
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transportations
a bus,
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train,
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alike with
improvement
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in infrastructures and investing in
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buying new vehicles. To sum up, in many countries, there are more and more
cars
on roads, and
this
lead
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to
high
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level of contamination. It is a fact that the more private
cars
, the more burden of
air
pollution
for the forthcoming generation.
However
, there are many
idea
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such
as newly
legislations
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about
emission
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emissions
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and
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encouraging
encouring
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encouraging
people
to choose public
transportations
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to can solve
this
issue.
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