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Every year several languages die out. Some people think that this is not important because life will be easier if there are fewer languages in the world. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

#year #languages #people #life #world
It is argued that if all
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humans speak
a
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 same tongue,
people
 will have
higher
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 living
standard
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.
Although
 I think unified
tongues
 bring some advantages in daily life, I tend to believe fewer
languages
 will have lots of bad impacts
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ourselves
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.
People
 in favour of the idea consider that using
same
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languages
 can make our life more convenient. Compared with using different
tongues
, when
people
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 to other countries, they can talk with local
people
 there directly without language barriers.
Additionally
,
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type
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 of language means less pressure and stress for students. All teenagers need to learn a new language in their school.
Therefore
, if students have
less
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 academic burden, they can have time to build a habit or focus on other heavy subjects.
On the other hand
, different
tongues
 can show diversity and multiformity
in
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the
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 global perspective. Different
languages
 represent different cultures and characteristics of nations. Humans can have a pluralistic world. That means our society can have
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 tolerance and everyone can be treated equally.
In addition
, learning different
languages
 can improve
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persons’
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person’s
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 ability in different terms.
For example
,
people
 can practice communication and social skills by using different
tongues
. They need to deal with
people
 with
different
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personality
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personalities
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.
Therefore
, teenagers can have experience in communicating with
people
 in their future
career
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.
Finally
, learning
languages
 is a way for
people
 to
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. If
people
 have leisure time,
study
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 a new tongue is a fascinating choice.
People
 not only study useful knowledge and have an efficient way to spend
free
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 time. In conclusion, it is true that
decrease
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quantity
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the quantity
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 of
languages
 can bring
convenient
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for
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 our life, but I tend to argue that speaking different
languages
 can help us create
a better lives
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a better life
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Linguistic diversity
  • Cultural heritage
  • Language extinction
  • Communication barrier
  • Linguistic imperialism
  • Endangered languages
  • Language revitalization
  • Monolingual
  • Multilingual
  • Language preservation
  • Homogenization
  • Language policy
  • Cultural assimilation
  • Intangible heritage
  • Indigenous languages
  • Globalization
  • Dialects
  • Localization
  • Language documentation
  • Digital archiving
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