Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmes ( for example working for charity, improving the neighbourhood or teaching sports to young children). To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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can be unpaid, while people try to earn money. Unpaid jobs
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community services that help to improve the environment. Following
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essay agrees that community service should be a compulsory part of high school. Good actions invariably will remember
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humanity. As a matter of fact working for
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, improving the neighbourhood or teaching sports to young children, assistance for war veterans will guide the world and the younger generation in the right way and good.
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in our country citizens must take care of them. Every year people are watching as heroes leave our world.
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high schools do not always take these cases seriously.
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generation will carry about children’s education, in my
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kids still will not take up unpaid community services. What is more, it is undeniable that nature
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, plastics, radioactive materials and
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of things. For
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children should be encouraged to do useful things to protect
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, to give illustration even collecting garbage,
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over metals and plastics to processing factories can give great benefits.
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decent things we can protect our environment. In conclusion, it can hardly be denied that some changes in school programmes can give
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. Not always every service can be paid. Good causes
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vivid example of the prosperity of the world.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • compulsory
  • high school programmes
  • unpaid community service
  • charity
  • improving the neighbourhood
  • teaching sports
  • sense of responsibility
  • empathy
  • broader perspective
  • societal issues
  • college applications
  • job applications
  • positive impact
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