Computers are being used more and more in education, discuss the advantages and disvantages and give your opinion.

✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
Computers are one of the biggest discoveries of mankind. starting from education to industrialisation According to my opinion,
usage
Correct article usage
the usage

It seems that there is an article usage problem here.

show examples
of computers
are
Change the verb form
is

The verb are does not seem to agree with the subject. Consider changing the verb form.

show examples
essential but it is taking away all the old good habits of people which were
practiced
Change the spelling
practised

The spelling of practiced is a non-British variant. For consistency, consider replacing it with the British English spelling.

show examples
earlier.
From
Change preposition
Over

It seems that preposition use may be incorrect here.

show examples
the
last
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

few decades, automation has taken over manual
machineries
Change the wording
machinery
types of machinery
pieces of machinery

It appears that machineries is an uncountable noun and should not be made plural. Consider changing the noun.

show examples
throughout the world.
Submitted by Ananya Saha on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: