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The depicted bar chart represents the proportion of regular physical activities of males and females among six
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 groups in Australia in 2010. Overall,
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 were more dominant in physical exercise than men. The chart displays that there was evidence of a steady boost in the percentage of females who regularly worked out. Here, 52.8% of men from 15 to 24 exercised daily which was nearly 5% higher than
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 from that
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 group.
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, the scenario remained quite opposite in all other
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 groups. Physical activity was more trendy among
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 in the 25 to 34
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 group (48.9%) while males did around 6% less activity than their female counterparts.
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 dominance of
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 was more prevalent in
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 groups like 35 to 44, where 13% more
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 did workouts, in 45 to 44, where
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 overshadowed men by 10% approximately, and in 55 to 64, where the difference was about 8%. In the
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 group 65 and over,
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 difference was much less, where only 0.4% more females did the activity than males.
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