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Families who send their children to private schools should not be required to pay taxes that support the state education system. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement

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Nowadays，an increasing number of
people
 have a tendency to let their children study at private schools，which
make
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 plenty of parents generally believe that it is not essential for them to pay
taxes
 on
education
。But my view is that parents
whose
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who
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 spend a large amount of money
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to take
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take
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taking
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 their kids to private
school
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schools
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also
 need to pay
taxes
 for
education
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 system。
Firstly
，It is unfair for
people
 who don’t let their kids to private
school
 but still pay the same
taxes
 .If everyone let their child to private
school
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schools
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 not only don’t spend their money for paying
taxes
 but
also
 enjoy the same or
the
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a
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 better
education
，it may spark massive
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people's
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people
 interest to spare no effort
make
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to make
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 their kid study in
the
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a
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 private
school
。
Besides
，probably numerous parents keep the same points that they spend their money to pay
taxes
cant
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bring
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 some welfare for them,so they don’t want to pay any
taxes
 for
education
。Actually,not only these families but
also
 many other
people
 still pay some
taxes
 even though they might not use services at any time in their life.But it isn’t meant that the
taxes
about
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on
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education
 which
people
 pay bring more harm than good.
On the contrary
,by paying
for
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apply
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education
taxes
,
people
 s
kid
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kids
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 would accept a more and more high quality
of
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apply
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education
 which would promote children s physical and mental development.In fact,as a resident ,everyone
need
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 to act in order to make our country
grew
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 up
further
 and
further
 flourish and significant. In sum,admittedly,
whatever
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whether
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 families whose their child participate in
the
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apply
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private
school
 or not,paying
taxes
 for
education
 is necessary that everyone are accountable to do.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • tax exemption
  • public education
  • private schools
  • collective responsibility
  • societal welfare
  • equitable access
  • financial burden
  • social cohesion
  • tax credits
  • vouchers
  • subsidies
  • state-funded
  • socioeconomic disparities
  • public vs. private sector
  • quality of education
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