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University only requires to apply digital media rather than continuously upgrading textbook. Agree or disagree.

#university #media #textbook
Nowadays, an increasing number of people use their phones or computers for educational purposes
instead
 of traditional textbooks and upgrading information frequently in books has some problems. That's why it is often considered that universities must require only digital media
instead
 of the conventional system.
This
 essay will explain why I agree with
this
 view on the basis of its benefits
such
 as less damage to the nature and development of new learning methods. less damaged to nature and trees usage of
computer
Fix the agreement mistake
computers
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 and
phone
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phones
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, and
more easy
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easier
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 to upgrade, less money student poor To summarize in
the
Correct article usage
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light of the information given above, I can confidently say that, using digital tools
instead
 of textbooks have many benefits not only for the environment but
also
 the education since nowadays people are more prone to use technological devices.
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