Some people think that it is better to educate boys and girls in separate schools. Others,however,believe that boys and girls benefit more attending mixed schools. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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problem between boys and girls is always hard
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around the
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. Some
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but in my opinion, I don't agree
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. I think boys and girls can
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develop
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more from attending mixed school. When students are educated in mixed schools, they can own a lot of
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when they
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different gender
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, they are not shy when they talk
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together. But, there are some
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shy when they talk to other
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is their behaviour and they cannot change
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that reason, I think the
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children
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gender education when they study in mixed schools. Because
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studying
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is not enough while they can look difference things for gender and body in their friend
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, I think children
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be educated in mixed
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because of having more skills and developing more
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physical and knowledge
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • co-education
  • gender segregation
  • peer pressure
  • academic performance
  • gender stereotypes
  • discrimination
  • social skills
  • teamwork
  • collaboration
  • diversity
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