Some people think that high salary is important when choosing a company to work for, while others think that good working atmosphere is more important. Discuss both view points and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant example from your own knowledge or experience.

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applying to work at a company the most important thing is how much the employee will earn. Others believe the way they are going to
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there is more relevant. I agree that
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where they
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more comfortable not only with their wage but
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. The following paragraphs will highlight both views and some examples.
First
of all, money is essential for living.
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Nowadays
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dramatically
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rising and
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extremely high,
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accepting
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accepting
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.
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, during the pandemic, companies had to close their businesses as the population had to keep isolated,
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government were refounding families to live. These days,
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is coming back to normal, but it is difficult to find a company
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pays a good wage. For that reason, individuals have to choose the
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company
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company
that pays better.
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, there are some companies that
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well
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but
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people
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as
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workers have to be outside or are too
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restrict
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with their employees and get really tense.
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, some individuals need to pay for
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and
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medication because they do not
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good
with
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their
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. For that reason, choosing a place
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atmosphere
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atmosphere
suits the person can not only makes them happy
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but
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avoid them to get sick and improve their lifestyle. To conclude, in my opinion, individuals witch choose
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job only
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how much they are going to earn can
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damage
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damage
their health, so they should choose
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jobs
that make them
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fell
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good
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the
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atmosphere
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atmosphere
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Include an introduction and conclusion

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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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